Shadows Of The Past
My shadow is many things
Not just my body
Blocking sun rays from hitting the ground
It also reminds us of the past
And what is behind me
Like when I would play hide-and-go seek
Or dress up
When i was little
I say this because unless I am turned at just the right angle
It is always behind me
It also reminds me
That no matter what
I am never alone
I always have someone to tell my problems
And talk to if im down
Administrator said,
November 7, 2005 @ 6:17 pm
I’m looking for focus, details, and a personal voice in poems.
Your poem has a focus… your shadow!
Your poem has some details, but they are not specific.
Your poem has some voice.
I think if you made it about a specific time that you saw your shadow and talked to it about your problems, it would take this from a good poem to a great one.